Spanish: Los programas de igualdad de oportunidades se empezaron a aplicar en el campo laboral debido a que ahí se necesita urgentemente suprimir la discriminación, ya que ésta afecta sobre todo a la población femenina.
First Draft: Equal opportunity programs were first enacted in the workplace since there is an urgent need to do away with discrimination there, as it affects the female population above all.
Revised Sentence: Equal opportunity programs were first put in place on the job, since the elimination of discrimination there was an urgent priority due to its overwhelming impact on women.
Like twenty minutes on the revision of one sentence. But I think it is better now!
First Draft: Equal opportunity programs were first enacted in the workplace since there is an urgent need to do away with discrimination there, as it affects the female population above all.
Revised Sentence: Equal opportunity programs were first put in place on the job, since the elimination of discrimination there was an urgent priority due to its overwhelming impact on women.
Like twenty minutes on the revision of one sentence. But I think it is better now!